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Some people think that the range of technology currently available is increasing the gap between rich people and poor people. Others think that it is causing the opposite effect. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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Among individuals are some who assert that the
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 of
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, which is available in today's world, increased the
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 between citizens, whereas others disagree with
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 them. In my opinion, I completely agree with the
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 opinion. On the one hand, some think that the range of
technology
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 available narrowed the
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 between
people
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technology
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 is available to almost everyone.
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a review that was carried out by Google in 2020 found that
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 more than 80% of the world population
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 access the modern
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 through physical stores and online.
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 poverty can prevent some
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 from enjoying the current
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, many
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technology related
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 project plans are now available than before.
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, many citizens use them and
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, they are able to compete with each other.
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, others assert that the current computerization increases the
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 is due to the fact that copyrights prevent many individuals from having access to data.
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the online
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 and patents are restricted only
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 those who can afford to pay for
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them
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, many are left with no viable alternative, especially those who are in bad shape financially. In
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 of
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 nowadays plays a role in broadening the
gap
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 among
people
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. In conclusion, there has been a heated debate on
wheather
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whether
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that is
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 currently accessible increased or decreased the
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 among
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. I definitely think that it increased the
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 among them as they do not have fair access to it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital divide
  • Socio-economic classes
  • Economic opportunities
  • Democratizes access
  • Technological gadgets
  • Advanced educational tools
  • Remote work
  • Online courses
  • Digital literacy
  • Digital inclusion
  • Underprivileged communities
  • Technological advancements
  • Cutting-edge technologies
  • Economic standing
  • Quality of life
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