Last month you had an overseas holiday with a friend from your college. They have just sent you some holiday photos together. In your letter: thank them for the holiday and the photos Explain why you didn't write earlier. invite them to come and stay with you

Dear Friend I am writing
this
letter to you acknowledge of photos which you sent In the beginning, I am thanking you for the holiday which we spent together by
last
month. It is an unforgettable moment.
Besides
, we explored the trip undoubtedly. Especially, hilly places and nature are mind-blowing creativity of nature,
Consequently
, eschew the work pressure as well as create mental happiness.
On the other hand
, I am very happy to see that photos and it recollects memories.
Moreover
, the Photos which you took it is exhibited in professional photography.
Secondly
, I am apologizing to you, Because of that, I am unable to write the letter, Due to some official task and duties,
Consequently
, I engage
with
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office affairs.
Accordingly
, I had a
two day
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two-day

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business trip to London.
Finally
, I am kindly inviting to you visit my home and stay a couple of days.
In addition
, we can explore my place. As I have said, to you before about my place. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours Lovingly,
Ramshad
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Rashad
Rams had

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