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These days, many people have their own computer and telephone, so it is quite easy for them to do their job at home. Does working at home have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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Nowadays, computers and telephones are popular among people,making it convenient to
work
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home
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This
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 essay will examine the advantages and
disadvantages
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 of working at
home
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 and provide a logical conclusion. Whilst acknowledging that there are benefits, the essay will argue that there are more drawbacks. Working at
home
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 can cause some major
disadvantages
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 like
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work
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 efficiency and the wrong recognition of yourself.
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 with, amounts of people are not self-disciplined and digital products are just the source of it,which leads to the low efficiency while working. What’s
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,
long
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time
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 of no company of workmates and the social can narrow down your view,giving rise to an illusion that you have done very well. But in
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 world, you may have
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 behind others a long way.
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, the two main advantages of working at
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 are
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 comfortable environment and less
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waste
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 on road.
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,
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 is the most comfortable place to live for almost all people, where you can pay attention to yourself and leave out workmates’ views on you.
Secondly
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, precious
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 can be saved from working at
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 ,
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 of taking a long trip to your company or school.
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, you can spare
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 to sleep,eat a healthy breakfast and do more jobs.
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,
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 you may feel well at
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,
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that the attraction of digital products is much too more than working,
disadvantages
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 can ruin your motivation for
work
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.
To
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 conclusion,
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 working at
home
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make
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 you feel more comfortable, it can not be doubted the drawbacks weigh more
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 the low efficiency of
work
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 and the wrong self-satisfactory feeling. So I believe that the
disadvantages
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 are more than
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the advantages
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