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When someone achieves greatness thanks to an innovation or other breakthrough, it is usually agreed that the individual has a high level of intelligence.  Do you think that inborn thinking skills play the main role in the successful life of people?  What role does ‘nurtured’ intelligence play in achievements of a successful person?

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It has been argued that people who made discoveries and
innovation
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 have
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success
 thanks to their
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high
 intelligence rate.
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 discuss
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innate
abilitieas
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abilities
 as a main part of self-development and will highlight the role of
self-teaching
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 process
in forming
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informing
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 the career of the
person
. Nature serves as the foundation for human physical and intellectual capacities. It is commonly known from biology courses that genes are encoded in human DNA and play an important part in shaping a
person
's personality.
For example
, kids from a family of exceptionally educated and smart people will inherit their genes.
Consequently
, a youngster will be more intelligent than his classmates. People who work hard to improve their cognitive talents can get good outcomes. Even if a
person
 was born into a low-income home with little resources, his drive to grow and improve might keep him from giving up.
Furthermore
, the environment has a significant effect
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 inspiring the individual. "If a man gets along with three millionaires, he will become the fourth" exemplifies the genuine meaning of
this
 concept. To sum up, individuals with inherited cognitive abilities are wonderfully
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.
However
, if a
person
 trains his brain properly, he may become a far more
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person
 and become successful in future.
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