Some people think that the government should take care of disadvantaged people such as the unemployed and the homeless. Do you agree or disagree?

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person
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from different walks of life
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entitled to live and survive. I fully agree that the government is held responsible for the welfare and assistance of their countryfolks.
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, people are the significant citizens of a country that the
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must be obliged and responsible enough for all their needs in
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a way they could save
this unfortunate individuals
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also
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preserve the essence of humanity within each other.
For instance
, in the Philippines which belongs to a
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third
world country. It has been observed that a stringent policy on building a national housing program to relocate those homeless are implemented in
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part of the
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, officials provide them
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roof on their
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and food on their
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.
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state of belongingness since their homeland rendered them a wide range of services that they could offer which leads to a successful thriving nation.
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, each individual has the right to live and survive as well they play a vital role in every community which the country must focus on their existence.
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they mandated a law,
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population must obtain
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stable employment to
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sustain
and maintain their basic commodities in every household.
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is the reason why Japan government skyrocketed their economic status revenue since they give their full support to the public. In return, people as well paid off the taxes for the improvement and
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success
of their own nation.
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just a give and take relationship indeed. In summary, every nation must
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their pledges
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their countrymen by shouldering and assisting the
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welfare specifically both the jobless and homeless person. So that in the
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, these individuals will feel the significance of humanitarian
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and the chance of surviving.
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