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Plastic bags, plastic bottle: and plastic packaging are bad for the environment What damage does plastic do (a mo environment? Whai can be done by governments and Individuals to solve this problem?

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Introduction
in my
opinion
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 government Should Help to grow up culture for
do
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does
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 not
use
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a
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apply
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plastic
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 by
Give
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Giving
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 facilities and they should attempt to
to
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live environment .
Body paragraph 1
as you know some people have noT tendency for
help
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 to Keep
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environment
enviroment
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the enviroment
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 by
reform
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reforming
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 theIr life and it's entirely hard to change for them
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howEver
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,
Goverment
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Government
 can fix
this
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 problem By new laws.
Body paragraph 2
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On an
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The
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An other
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Another
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 hand,We can don't
use
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 Of
plastic
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 bagS When we are going to the shopping or Mall for bUy aNything's
a
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such
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 as: fruit, food, vegetable or even clothes.
Body paragraph 3
In addition
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,
people's
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people
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 is better
use
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to
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apply
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a glass bottle
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instead
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ofinstead
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plastic
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 bottle because
plastic
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 is not renewable and
plastic
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stay
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stays
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 in the
enviroment
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environment
 for many years.
Conclusion
I think
government
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the government
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 for new and
regurd
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regard
 laws can help to make
new
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a new
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 style of life and people should help by don't
use
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of
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apply
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plastic
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 equipment and
insted
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instead
 of
paper
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a paper
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bag
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bags
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 or glass
bottel
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bottle
 . when I go to the Natural attraction I have been a cleaning environment when I was 20 years. I believe is culture course has nice Earth

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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