Some believe that people today have no interest in maintaining the traditional culture of their country. Others believe that it is still important to people that we preserve a traditional way of life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Today we live in a globalised world and the development of global culture is often at the expense of local traditions. There are certainly many
people
who show indifference to local customs in favour of embracing global ideas, but there are still many who see the value in maintaining them, myself included. It is easy to argue that
people
are strongly influenced by the effects of globalisation. Technology
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in particular
seems to dominate the leisure time of young
people
, whether it be gadgets or the internet.
As a result
, there are trends which can be described as global in all aspects of culture.
For instance
, many
people
now prefer listening to
music
by Ed Sheeran or Beyoncé rather than the traditional
music
of their country, which is often seen as
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comparison.
Similarly
, many would rather try exotic ‘foreign’ foods than use traditional recipes, which they might see as dull or old-fashioned.
However
, it would be a mistake to think that everyone thinks
this
way. Older
people
especially feel nostalgia for how things used to be done
For example
, in the UK, the Royal Family are as popular as ever, and thousands of
people
turn out to see them wherever they go. It should
also
be remembered that many of today's global pop stars were themselves inspired by more traditional genres of
music
. Ed Sheeran,
for example
, embodies many musical traditions,
such
as folk
music
and busking. In the same way, it is still common to see performances of more traditional forms of
music
,
such
as classical and jazz. My own opinion is that there is truth in both views. There are certain
people
that are so focused on global trends that there is no space in their lives for, or interest in, preserving the past.
On the other hand
, there are many who prefer to live their lives more nostalgically and value the traditions that have been handed down. I would say that I belong more to
this
second
group of
people
,
although
I admit I would struggle without the internet.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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