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Eventually, technology will solve the most important environmental problems the world faces today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is considered that
technology
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 will assist us to alter the paramount environmental issues,
such
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 as air pollution.
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, while creating the modern world, we caused detrimental effects on our surroundings, it is very clear to me by the recent findings of scientists that future
technology
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 is one of the ways through which we can restore the earth. Since the era of the Industrial
revolution
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, we are
terrib
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terrible
;y impacting the environment through
emission
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the emission
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 of dangerous gases
in to
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 our atmosphere.
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, many parts of the world are facing serious problems regarding a rise in
temperture
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temperature
 and bad air quality.
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, with new findings in science, we can solve the terrible effects we have on our planet.
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- an invention
such
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 as
geo engineering
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geoengineering
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 is in the phase of testing, which will provide great aid to reduce the temperature,
thus
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 making the earth cooler.
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,
an
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apply
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innovations are encouraged by the government to find solutions using technologies to absorb toxic particles from the air.
Large
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 number of big manufacturing companies are making their production process carbon neutral,
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, the new type of machines will in
application
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the application
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,
which
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apply
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produces
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produce
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 a minimal amount of waste and
give
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same
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 amount of output. To illustrate
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, the apple company is turning their manufacturing process full on renewable energy, and
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 they have plans to recall their old iPhones to refurbish as to lower the electronic waste. In summary, we, citizens of the world are responsible for making a mess in our environment,
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, with some changes in the
technology
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 we are in the new era of making the planet earth more suitable for us, as it used to be before. I
agree
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 the notion that
technology
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 will significantly help to change the impact on the
environmental
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environment
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.
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