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At the present time, the population of some countrles Includes a relathvely large number of young aduits, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outwelgh the disadvantages?

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At the present, the population of young adults in some
country
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 has
overtake
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 the population of older
people
.
The young
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Young
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adult
 has become the majority of
population
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the population
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. I will
discussing
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 the advantages and
disadvantages
. In my opinion, the advantages outweigh the
disadvantages
. The advantage of having more young
adult
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adults
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 is newer
idea
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 and society. The old
people
 have less
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effect
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affect
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effect
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in
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 the modern society,
therefor
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therefore
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 the newer generation can have more freedom of thinking. One of the
reason
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 why china has the largest growth rate
is
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in
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 the country let the newer generation
to
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work and develop to country.
One
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 the other hand, the younger generation
do
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does
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 not have much experience, so they are slow at
first
. Old
people
 work
efficiently
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more efficiently
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 than young
adult
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adults
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. They can use the resource they have very efficiently to
there
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their
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 advantage.
For example
, the Thailand government is consist of old
people
 wich use the resource very efficiently from the citizen to make the most for
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themself
themselves
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them self
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themself
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. To sum it up, the advantages outweigh the
disadvantages
. I think the young
adult
need
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 to take control and have guidance from the older
people
.
This
 way you eliminate the
disadvantages
 and make your work most efficient.
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