In some countries, small town-centre shops are going out of business because people tend to drive to large out-of-town stores. As a result, people without cars have limited access to out-of-town stores, and it may increase the use of cars. Do you think the advantages of this change outweigh its advantages?

The given bar charts provide information about data connected to
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and drawbacks of Fairmont Island. Overall, there are two graphs which include different categories mentioned by visitors. It can be seen that the most important disadvantage is living expenses while view and community are the most significant pros. The
first
diagram consists of disadvantages and the most popular of them is the too high price of living which take almost half of the chart.
Aslo
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Also
, there is a category
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called entertainment and it takes
fewer
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data by 15%.
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weather takes 20% and food quality only 5%. The
second
chart illustrates statistics about
benefits
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of the island. The most common of them include 40% and
this
category is called people. According to the opinion of
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who visited
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place,
local
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scenery takes a bit less than the previous one (37%).
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, good accommodation takes almost
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of all advantages and culture is 12%.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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