Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days people place a

primum

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premium

on working from

early

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age. Some people think, they should be paid, while other argue they should be required to do unpaid

work

in their leisure time. In my view

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they must

work

for free when they are teenagers. To advance a convincing theory I could deal with, new experiences. Albite

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is very annoying to

work

for no payment, you will acquire knowledge, that will help you in future. On top of that, when everything is rough you think more about

money

and how to have more income,

you

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sight won’t be limited,

you

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and you

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will think about different ways to make more

money

For instance

, I used to

work

in school as a teacher

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without

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with out

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without

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no payment,

after

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a while I decided to think of different ways to have income. I have tried different ways since

then

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result

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now I know how can I

achive

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achieve

my goals.

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to what I have just said,

specially

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if you want to

work

for

your self

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yourself

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and be a freelancer, your mind

stracture

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structure

shouldn’t think of the

money

you will

recive

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receive

at the end of each month. We should consider that it doesn’t have ill effects on their lives.

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, owing to

this

job, they don’t have limited time to exercise or hang out with their friends, as a

teenage

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they really need it. Or if they have economical problems, they can

work

for

money

. They mustn’t be under pressure. To conclude, with the aim of being an

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entrepreneur

and

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free

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mind to think of

different

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solution

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to be a

millioner

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millionaire

you mustn’t have income at

first

, you only need to learn from your job. Gone is the idea of working for

money

should

work

for you.

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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required
unpaid
community work
benefit
teenagers
life skills
volunteering
empathy
compassion
socially aware
responsible
interact
diverse backgrounds
cultural understanding
tolerance
work experience
essential skills
employment
interests
passions
career development
contribute
betterment
development
local community
mental well-being
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Fully explain your ideas

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