In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

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is one of the precious
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that we want in our life. Wherever every human
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to achieve their dreams and goals by their own hard-working. Particularly, in some family cultures, youngsters are motivated to do
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tasks with their courageous attempts.
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occurred sometimes negatively or positively in
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my opinion too.
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their own future plans and they get
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to fulfil their dreams. Particularly, these children's parents always give to
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positive vibes and unconditional
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to assist success in their ambitions. Due to
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, they focus to do their study exercises in
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manner with hard-working.
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, in 2000 an Indian survey shows that 80%of juniors who had the motivational and derivative mindset
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occasionally attained to do anything with self-confidence.
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, they occur a positive mindset in
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life so it makes them easier to catch their longtime ambitions.
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a flip of the coin,
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teen
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trying to attain unrealistic goals in
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over efforts to acquire non-happening things.
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their
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ages even
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had money, become frustrated. Admittedly, they
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unhealthy students with depression, anxiety, and
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over thinking
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feelings. In conclusion, iny perspective, since childhood when we get more and more help and positive encouragements, it paves the way to boost act as a hard worker. Wherever youth have benefits of
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rather than detrimental issues. Unless we become lazy in our lives, unable to complete our future plans.
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