Demand for gas and oil is increasing and so finding new sources in remote and untouched areas is a necessity. Do the advantages of this is outweigh the disadvantages?
Overpopulation is taking place so fast globally,
therefore
, the nation’s demands for fossil fuels have increased dramatically. Some people claim that it is essential to explore new sources of energy
in secluded zones in order to fulfil this
requirement. While
there are some drawbacks associated with this
issue, I believe the main benefits are more substantial.
On the one hand, searching for new energy
has a myriad of benefits. Firstly
, since using gas and oil for human consumption brings several environmental issues such
as excessive air pollution which leads to detrimental health problems, substituting renewable energy
contributes to decreasing pollution. As a result
, the rate of respiratory disease would see a significant drop. Secondly
, from an environmental perspective, the consumption of eco-friendly resources is beneficial not only for human beings but also
for all kinds of creatures in the world. For instance
, the quality of soil would improve significantly which results in efficient cultivation and productive agriculture. Consequently
, people have unlimited access to green resources and high-yield products which guarantee their health status.
On the other hand
, new exploration of natural resources requires a great deal of investment. In other words
, governments should allocate a large amount of budget to searching for renewable energy
, subsequently
, it may impose some restrictions on nations. In addition
, the process of digging the ground, using constructive devices and materials may have an adverse effect on wildlife habitats. For example
, in the North Pole launching such
exploratory projects may lead to damage to the environmental residence of the penguins and polar bears.
In conclusion, although
finding novel means of energy
generation has some demerits, in my view, its advantages in terms of air pollution decline and wildlife habitat improvement outweigh the disadvantages.Submitted by shabnam.sohanian on
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For task achievement, make sure to fully address the question prompt by directly discussing the advantages and disadvantages of exploring new oil and gas sources, rather than shifting focus to renewable energy. This will ensure a more direct and complete response to the task.
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For developing your main points, integrating more specific and varied examples related to the topic of gas and oil exploration would strengthen your argument. Research and mention real-world scenarios where exploring new sources has had significant impacts, either positive or negative.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.
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