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Band 6.5

you live near a public school. the school has asked local residents to help with the maintenance of school buildings and play area. Write a letter to the principal. in your letter, -explain why you would like to help -tell them how you can help -let them know when you are available

Dear Sir, With due respect, I am Harry, my house is adjacent to the northwest wall of your Saint Thomes
school
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. Through
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 letter, I would like to show my willingness towards the notice from your
school
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 about assistance in the maintenance of
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school
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the school
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building
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buildings
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 and
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playground
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play ground
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playground
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 from the residents. At the onset, I am interested
into
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 providing my help in
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 particular task because I feel proud if I impart my prowess in grass cutting to the
school
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. As I am a member of
local
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the local
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environment
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 protection union, I can guide students
about
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on
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 how to maintain a clean atmosphere
in
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 the
school
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 premises. Not only can I help to collect some funds for the
school
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 by using my union contacts, but
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 I love to cut the excess grass from
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school
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the school
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 ground and near
to
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apply
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building
number
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numbers
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 3 to 5.
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, I have
special
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a special
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 grass cutter which can save a lot of time.
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, because I work as a manager in Woodera company, I can only be available on weekends or before for one hour in the mornings from 6 am to 7 am. If you allow me to utilize
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 time to maintain the beauty of the best
school
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of
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 our town, it will be
appriciated
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appreciated
 a lot. Look forward to
hearning
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hearing
 from you soon. Yours faithfully, Harry Brown

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