Last month you had an overseas holiday with a friend from your college. They have just sent you some holiday photos together. In your letter: thank them for the holiday and the photos Explain why you didn't write earlier. invite them to come and stay with you

Hi Cartoon and Sasi, How are you doing? It was a very precious moment while we were in Spain. I want to thank you for your kindness and helpfulness during our trip
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all the photos are incredibly beautiful. I could not imagine how I would have fun without you guys. I was close to the final exam after we were separated and
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why I did not write to you earlier. I hope you did not feel bad about it. One more thing, I just moved to a new apartment and want to have a small party with you two. The party will
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on Sunday 13th August
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room 456 New Street road. I will probably cook some Japanese food and make some Danish pastries, so If you want something
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just let me know and I will try to prepare them. Looking forward to hearing from you and thanks again for the wonderful trip. Best Wishes,
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