Many people leave their home country and go to other countries to live and work. Why do you think it is happening? Do the advantages of this trend outweigh its disadvantages?
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countries
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as well as
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The essay addresses both the reasons why people move and the advantages and disadvantages, showing an understanding of the prompt.
task achievement
Good use of examples like higher education and supportive systems in developed countries to illustrate points, although they could be expanded further.
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