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The tourist industry has grown enormously over the last fifty years and there are few places which are unaffected by it. However, tourism rarely benefits the countries which tourists visit. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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modern society, the tourist industry has been developing tremendously over the
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 five decades and yet, there are various destinations which are untouched by
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tourism
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. Unfortunately, it is believed that
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 barely profits the countries which people go on. From my perspective, I hold a neutral viewpoint over the given sentiment due to some compelling reasons. On the one hand,
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 main factor in terms of the enhancement of a country’s economy.
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 there might be several bad effects, most societies, obviously, rely on the revenue and the employment they gained from these activities.
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, Phu Quoc, one of the most famous tourist attractions in the world, plays a key role in
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Vietnam’s
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 industry since it offers the locals job services effectively.
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, people, especially teenagers, tend to go overseas to enjoy their
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.
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 can be an opportunity for them to broaden their knowledge as they get to have a cultural exchange with the host country
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 they are temporarily residing.
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, every industry will leave a negative impact on the country’s environment and in
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, it is true that the more the trips are, the more polluted the air is going to be. The reason
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 to the people with inappropriate
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 as littering or smoking on the streets.
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, money is everything so the tour organizer may want some profit for their company budget.
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 a mass scale. In conclusion, most
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nations always depend on the benefit that
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 may bring but if they don’t handle the situation successfully, bad consequences will happen.
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