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If you could study a subject that you have never had the opportunity to study, what would you choose? Explain your choice, using specific reasons and details.

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I completed my bachelor's degree in biomedical engineering.
However
, if I would get another chance, I would prefer to study extraterrestrial
activities
, because there are numerous benefits. I would discuss my point of view in the following paragraphs. With regard to cosmic research, many people think that research on outer
space
-related
activities
 is a total waste of time and money, but in my view, it will be beneficial for humanity in the future. The
first
 benefit of
this
 research is that we will be able to know about the possibility of the existence of human life in
space
.
Secondly
, By sending the satellites into
space
, we will be able to closely monitor the changes in the earth's environment. Because of
this
, we will be alert and able to take any preventative measures before any natural disaster like a storm or heavy rainfall. Another benefit of satellite launching into
space
 is that we would make strong our
defense
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 system. To put it another way, we will closely be monitoring terrorism
activities
 and able to defend our nation's border.
Also
, due to
this
, every student can watch the live education-related session at his home via mobile phone or computer. When I was a child, my dream was that I would be able to take flight into
space
.
However
, my plans change but my dream has not vanished. I believe that in nearer time people will be capable to go to
space
 like, go to the museum. By way of conclusion, once again I reaffirm my statement that how outer related
activities
 are important. I think studying
space
 topic would give to me self-realization and more opportunities to achieve my goal.
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