Many people believe that countries should produce food for the whole population and import as little food as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is generally believed by certain individuals that
food
should be produced by
countries
for all public while they import at least
food
. Regarding
this
, I strongly agree with
this
assertion, On the one hand, in some nations
where
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that

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do not need to
concern
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be concern

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about
food
, financial stability is an important factor to these
countries
as they can allocate state funds for various industries
such
as education and public transportation.
Therefore
,
workforce
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the workforce

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should be sent to other industries
such
as factories and companies rather than agricultural and fishing industries in order to make more money that can be used
public
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for public

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services.
Moreover
, sometimes, importing
food
is much cheaper than producing
food
. the public cannot be satisfied by local
food
as they want
the
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variety of
food
. What
is
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are

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more some ingredients require special soil, weather, and temperature
.
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?

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For example
,
although
a significant number of Koreans like mangoes, growing mango trees
need
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needs

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an excessive amount of money in order to make
green houses
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greenhouses

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and hire
specialties
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specialities

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. As the example clearly illustrates, importing
food
is an efficient means of making citizens
being
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satisfied.
On the other hand
, the government of
countries
has a duty to help the population achieve basic needs
such
as
food
. Citizens cannot be satisfied Before the government solve the problem of a lack of
food
because they are not able to gain a sense of
secure
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when they suffer from the scarcity of
food
.
Therefore
, producing enough
food
for whole citizens can be a stepping stone to
increase
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increasing

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the standard of living.
In addition
, producing local
food
can decrease an environmental
problem
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problems

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since it reduces the consumption of fossil fuels that release
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greenhouse

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green-house
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greenhouse

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gases. When
countries
import
food
, aircraft and ships that need fossil fuels are used, thereby leading to global warming.
For instance
, recent media in Korea reports that
food
mileage increased by 30% from 2001 to 2010.
In other words
, carbon footprint
also
rose.
Hence
,
reduce
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reducing

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the amount of importing
food
as much as they can is crucial for the environment. In conclusion, while I accept that importing
food
rather than producing local
food
can sometimes be useful, there is no doubt that producing
food
can solve a lack of
food
.
Additionally
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it is one of the ways to prevent global warming.
As a result
,
countries
should produce
food
and less import
food
for future generations.
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