Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Attending a live performance (for example, a play, concert, or sporting event) is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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suggested that attending a
live
session like a concert or
event
is more joyful than a retelecast of the same
event
on the television screen. If questioned, I disagree with
this
standpoint, because I think the drawbacks far outweigh than advantages. I would discuss my opinion in the following paragraphs.
To begin
with, the
first
drawback is that audience has to pay an immense amount of money for watching a clear view. To put it another way, a
live
concert is held in a huge
stadium
. So, the seating arrangements are large. If someone's number comes on the behind he cannot see the clear view as compared to the nearest seating arrangments the ground.
Consequently
, somebody who wants to see a clear view will have to pay more money. Another disadvantage is that
people
who have booked the ticket have to spend a lot of time travelling to go to the
stadium
.
In addition
, they can not take any food packets and water bottles inside the
stadium
. So, they have to buy those things from the
stadium
at a more expensive price.
By contrast
,
people
who watch the same
event
via television from their home. They can see clearly the
event
and relax and settle in their favourite chair, eating a cake or having a drink.
On the other hand
, attending a
live
concert has few benefits.
Firstly
,
people
can enjoy concerts in real-time.
Secondly
, attending a
live
performance can give much more beautiful moments and positive energy to them. By way of conclusion, once again I reaffirm my statement that watching a
live
performance in retelecast mode via television has a lot of advantages in order of saving money, watching in a relaxed and comfortable atmosphere.
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