Many parents choose to teach their children at home instead of sending them schools. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

There is a popular trend of choosing home-schooling for
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some
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families. While
other
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said that home-schooling is better than going to public
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school

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shool
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, I would hold the belief that it has many difficulties when studying at home. Home-schooling has several advantages
to
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children
.
Firstly
, families could follow and respond to what their
children
need and how they learn best. They can design
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study program that
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their
children
’s abilities.
Therefore
, that may help
children
become smart and proactive in solving problems.
Secondly
, one-to-one lessons allow much faster progress.
As a result
,
children
could finish the course earlier than their peers. Home-schooling has several disadvantages
to
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children
.
Firstly
, most parents do not have enough time and knowledge to educate their
children
at home. They might hire a private tutor
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at

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an expensive cost.
However
, some tutors who offer inappropriate teaching methods may cause
children
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worse in learning.
Therefore
, parents would get
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burden on their families while their
children
do not learn anything.
Secondly
, these
children
may lack social skills,
such
as teamwork, sharing, and so on. Because learning at home would limit the opportunities of making friends with other
children
.
As a result
, the lack of those skills puts them under social pressure in the future. While it is true that home-
schoolong
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schooling

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could help
children
develop their brain, I believe that it brings some drawbacks for them.
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