In some countries, online shopping is getting more popular and replacing shopping in stores. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In many countries,
customers
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have become more familiar with buying things online and no longer visited physical stores. While others said that shopping is better than online shopping, I would hold the belief that online shopping has many benefits. Online shopping has several disadvantages for
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, goods would be transported through many stages and
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may cause the loss of goods.
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, the packages might go missing.
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, some actual
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may be different from
advertised
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the advertised
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images and descriptions.
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,
this
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make
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customers
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frustrated and their money
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to waste.
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, people could
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get scammed when buying goods on
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website
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websites
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. There would be no support for their bills. Online shopping on the internet has several
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advantages
for
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Firstly
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, with just a click,
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could order a wide variety of items, including
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only sold abroad,
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as cosmetics, clothes, and so on.
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, it is convenient because all packages
customers
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ordered
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are delivered to their homes.
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, items on
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websites
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online have reasonable prices with a lot of discounts because the shop owners do not need to pay for renting fees.
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, people might save money with those items. While it is true that
customers
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can easily choose the right
products
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when shopping in stores, I believe that online shopping introduces to
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a wider variety of
products
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.
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