Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world facing today. What are the causes of global warming and what measures can government and individuals take to tackle the issue.

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for online shopping and in-store shopping, and one reason is shared
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the two categories. Online In terms of online purchases, the two most compelling reasons are time saving*ndavoiding queuesThe former(A) accounts
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the latter(A) accounts
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