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Band 6.5

In the future, nobody will but printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

With the advancement of technology, in the near
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, all individuals have
access
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 to almost all the information they want online. Sometimes, it is argued that in the
future
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, there will not be any printed
newspapers
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 or
books
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 because of
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access
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. To some extent, I agree with
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 notion.
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 I understand
people
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's preference to read everything online without paying, I believe that in the
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, a few
people
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 will still like to read hard copies of
books
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 and magazines for several reasons. With the rapid growth of technology, the number of electronic devices
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 as smartphones, laptops, and book readers that have
access
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 to the Internet has risen substantially, making it easy for
people
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 to read everything online.
In contrast
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, the number of printed
books
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 and
newspapers
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 decreased significantly.
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, reading
books
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 and
newspapers
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 online has many good features that attract
people
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,
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 as it is easy to read, it is free most of the time, and it is portable.
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, individuals have
access
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 to information everywhere and anytime they want.
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, I have more than 100
books
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 and magazines on my cellphone and I can read whenever I want, it was impossible with paper
books
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. Despite all these advantages, it is unlikely that printed
newspapers
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 and magazines will disappear completely in the
future
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.
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 the majority of citizens tend to read everything online without paying, there will still be some printed
books
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 and
newspapers
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 because of many reasons.
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, many
people
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 have weak eyes,
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, they prefer to read printed
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instead
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 of digital ones.
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, digital screens
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 as cell phones and monitors emit blue light that can detrimentally affect human health. Not only does it have bad effects on the eyes and brain, but
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 it affects our sleep patterns,
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, many
people
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 do not like to look at screens all the time.
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, it feels good to hold paper
books
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 and flip through them,
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, despite my occupation being about computers and technologies and I read almost everything online, I prefer to read stories in hard copies of
books
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. In conclusion, I partially agree with the notion that
people
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 in the
future
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 read everything online.
While
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 I understand that with the advancement of technology,
people
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 in the
future
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 will have
access
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 to any information online, I do not think that printed
books
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 will be completely removed from the market.

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coherence cohesion
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introduction conclusion present
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complete response
The essay provides a comprehensive response to the prompt, clearly outlining reasons for agreeing and disagreeing with the statement.
introduction conclusion present
The conclusion succinctly summarizes your main points and restates your stance, which emphasizes the cohesiveness of your essay.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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