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In some countries, people encourage students to find part-time jobs while some people don't. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Many
students
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part-time, during their education to
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 finances. Whilst in some places
this
 is encouraged, others would argue that doing so might not be a good idea.
This
 essay will
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examine
 both sides of
this
 argument. Generally speaking, it
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appears
appeared
 that for most
students
this
 may be a good option. Part-time jobs allow
students
 to gain an insight into the working world. The transition from
student
 life to working a full-time
job
 is a big jump for some. A part-time
job
 would allow a
student
 to gain an understanding of the working world beforehand.
Moreover
,
this
 can help
students
 to gain a better understanding of what is expected from them in the future. Another benefit is, that
students
 will
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receive
 a salary.
This
 will help the
students
 in the future
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 when they will be in charge of managing their own money. As they already have gained experience from working part-time. Part-time jobs add create extra stress for already busy
students
. University can be a very stressful time for many,
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addtional
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additional
 responsibilities may be counterproductive. In short,
students
 should focus on their education, rather than working a part-time
job
. It is essential for a
student
 to perform well during their education
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 since it will
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determine
 their
job
 prospects in the future. In summary,
this
 essay has examined the benefits and drawbacks of working a part-time
job
 as a
student
. In my opinion,
this
 is
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decision
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 that everyone should make for themselves. If a
student
 believes that they can manage both successfully, they should try
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. As it can provide good insight into what they will be doing after university.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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