Many doctors recommend that older people exercise regularly, but most patient do not follow an exercise routine. what do you think why this happens? how people can be encouraged to exercise regularly?

It is often advised by most
of
Change preposition
apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

show examples
the clinicians to the elderly
people
to perform
exercises
on
the
Correct article usage
a

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

show examples
routine basis but
majority
Add an article
the majority
a majority

The noun phrase majority seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

show examples
of them fail to do so.
This
essay will discuss various reasons responsible for
this
and how
people
can be motivated to work out daily.
Undoubtedbly
Correct your spelling
Undoubtedly

If you don’t want Undoubtedbly to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

, exercise plays a pivotal role in maintaining
healthy
Add an article
a healthy

The noun phrase healthy lifestyle seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

show examples
lifestyle for every
age
group.
Although
, older
people
are more encouraged by the doctors for doing
exercises
Fix the agreement mistake
exercise

It seems that exercises may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

show examples
,
Remove the comma
apply

It appears that you have an unnecessary comma before the dependent clause marker because. Consider removing the comma.

show examples
because most
of
Change preposition
apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

show examples
the ailments
such
as diabetes, high cholesterol,
cardiac
Correct word choice
and cardiac

It seems that conjunction use may be incorrect here.

show examples
problems are
age associated
Add a hyphen
age-associated

It appears that age associated is missing a hyphen. Consider adding the hyphen(s).

show examples
.
However
,
majority
Correct article usage
the majority

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

show examples
of them are unable to exercise
regulary
Correct your spelling
regularly

If you don’t want regulary to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

.
This
could be due to many reasons
such
as poor dexterity,
joint
Correct word choice
and joint

It seems that conjunction use may be incorrect here.

show examples
and muscle pain and apparently they feel more fatigue as compared to
younger
Correct article usage
the younger

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

show examples
age
group.
In addition
to
this
aging
Change the spelling
ageing

The spelling of aging is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

show examples
results in behaviour changes.
For instance
, many studies have proved that old
age
individuals are more stubborn as compared to middle or younger
age
group.
Hence
, they do not like to follow the recommendations, even if it is prescribed by the doctors for their own good.
However
, many measures can be taken by the governing bodies as well as the communities to inspire
aging
Change the spelling
ageing

The spelling of aging is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

show examples
people
to perform
exercises
.
Firstly
, the government should consider
on
Change preposition
apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

show examples
building more public parks, walking pathways as well as sports centres for the senior citizens.
Secondly
, family and friends should
also
persuade elderly
people
to perform
exercises
by making them aware of its health benefits.
For instance
, in India
maily
Correct your spelling
mainly

If you don’t want maily to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

in the urban areas, in the living
societies
Add a comma
,societies

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase in the living societies. Consider adding a comma.

show examples
people
have started laughter clubs where not only the old
age
people
cherish but
also
exercise on
the
Correct article usage
a

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

show examples
routine basis.
Therefore
, both the government and
people
should make efforts to teach aged individuals the value of working out. In the conclusion,
although
pertaining to old
age
and many
health related
Add a hyphen
health-related

It appears that health related is missing a hyphen. Consider adding the hyphen(s).

show examples
problems, individuals fail to follow
doctors
Change noun form
doctors'
doctor's

It seems that this noun form may be incorrect.

show examples
recommendations on routine
exercises
. But with combined efforts of the government and
people
as well as medical professionals
this
problem can be resolved and
elderly
Correct article usage
the elderly

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

show examples
can be guided to do
exercises
to maintain a healthy life.
Submitted by drvishal13 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Improve your band scores without paying for expensive tutoring
Instantly see mistakes you've made and learn how to avoid them.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Read more in the eBook

The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »

* free ebook for Premium users

What to do next:
Look at other essays:
Quick and easy way to check your IELTS writing task 1&2
Writing9 scans your text for all types of mistakes, from typos to sentence structure problems and beyond.