Grandparents play a big role in the bringing up their grandchildren. Do you think it it useful for grandparents to be involved ? what is your opinion.

It is undeniable fact that
grandparents
can play an indispensable part in the bringing up their
children
. In fact,
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role is quite impactful as a
supportor
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, motivator and teacher.
This
essay will delve deeper into these in the impending paragraphs along with my opinion in the conclusion.
To begin
with, if
grandparents
contribute a considerable part in raising their
children
, they can provide their support to them. To explain,
grandparents
can give
a
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financial support
in
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the family and to their
grandchildren
too which can make them able to deal with the hard times by using their pensions and other sources.
Moreover
, not only do
grandparents
can help their
grandchildren
by giving them money
,
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but
also
there is no need to appoint a person to babysit the
grandchildren
. A survey conducted by Oxford University in March
,
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2015
that
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manifestly revealed that 65% of parents accepted the fact that
grandparents
helped in
the
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babysitting their
children
which saved a lot of their money.
Furthermore
, since
grandparents
have had prowess
of
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many pragmatic situations, during the bringing up their
grandchildren
, they can share their experiences with them.
Hence
,
this
may help their
grandchildren
in
various
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way
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like to deal
the
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with the

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pressure of studies and to take the decision wisely.
In addition
,
grandparents
can be the good companion
of
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their
grandchildren
and in a friendly
way
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grandparents
can teach them many social and domestic skills.
For example
, cooking, co-operation, and table manners. To conclude, it is unequivocal that
grandparents
have a significant role in the bringing up their
children
. I believe their presence, during
this
time, can teach, support and motivate their
grandchildren
towards
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the right
directions
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