Today, many people do not know their neighbors in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

Nowadays,
people
living in major cities are not familiar with their
neighbors
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. The main reasons for
this
issue could be high population cities and changing houses more frequently.
However
, residents can still know their
neighbors
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neighbours

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by meeting them which I explain more about it in
this
essay. As
population
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the population

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is considerably huge in urban areas,
people
do not have the chance to meet the local
people
living near their houses. At the same time, the number of homes has increased, which results in not visiting
neighbors
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even one, most of the time
people
are not sure who their
neighbors
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are.
Moreover
, the number of moving the living places has grown remarkably. Many humans move to a new area
,
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because they had
rent
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their home previously or immigrate to another town,
and
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or

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country.
Consequently
, they could not have enough time to
have
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interaction with their
neighbors
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neighbours

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,
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and
have
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communication with them.
Although
living condition
in
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these days does not provide
opportunity
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an opportunity
the opportunity

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for
neighbors
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neighbours

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to know each other, they can hold some
neighborhood
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neighbourhood

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events to see each other. By attending local events,
people
can speak and even make new friends.
For instance
, some
neighborhood
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neighbourhood

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citizens can arrange some
competition
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or cultural ceremonies;
as a result
, locals are invited and attracted to join. In conclusion,
todays'
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today's

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lives make
people
not to know each other in a living district,
capital
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and capital

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cities have enlarged in
number
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a number
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of residents.
In addition
,
people
vary their living location more often than in the past.
Nevertheless
, I believe by holding local events, they can tackle
this
issue.
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