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Today, many people do not know their neighbors in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

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Nowadays,
people
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 living in major cities are not familiar with their
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neighbors
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. The main reasons for
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 issue could be high population cities and changing houses more frequently.
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, residents can still know their
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 by meeting them which I explain more about it in
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 essay. As
population
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the population
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 is considerably huge in urban areas,
people
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 do not have the chance to meet the local
people
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 living near their houses. At the same time, the number of homes has increased, which results in not visiting
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neighbors
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 even one, most of the time
people
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 are not sure who their
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neighbors
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 are.
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, the number of moving the living places has grown remarkably. Many humans move to a new area
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 because they had
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 their home previously or immigrate to another town,
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 country.
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, they could not have enough time to
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interaction with their
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neighbors
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,
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 and
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communication with them.
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 living condition
in
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these days does not provide
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an opportunity
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 for
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neighbors
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 to know each other, they can hold some
neighborhood
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 events to see each other. By attending local events,
people
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 can speak and even make new friends.
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, some
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 citizens can arrange some
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 or cultural ceremonies;
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, locals are invited and attracted to join. In conclusion,
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 lives make
people
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 not to know each other in a living district,
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 cities have enlarged in
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a number
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 of residents.
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,
people
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 vary their living location more often than in the past.
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, I believe by holding local events, they can tackle
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 issue.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sense of community
  • isolation
  • loneliness
  • support network
  • sense of security
  • trust
  • cooperation
  • social support
  • integration
  • community events
  • shared spaces
  • neighborly interactions
  • neighborhood watch programs
  • community engagement
  • technology
  • connect
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