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Today, many people do not know their neighbours in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

Nowadays,
people
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 living in major cities are not familiar with their
neighbours
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. The main reasons for
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 issue could be high population cities and changing houses more frequently.
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, residents can still know their
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 by meeting them, which I explain more about it in
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 essay. As the population is considerably huge in urban areas,
people
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 do not have the chance to meet the local
people
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 living near their houses. At the same time, the number of homes has increased, which results in not visiting
neighbours
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 even once; most of the time,
people
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 are not sure who their
neighbours
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 are.
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, the number of moving the living places has grown remarkably. Many humans move to a new area because they had rented their home previously or immigrated to another town and country.
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, they could not have enough time to interact with their
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 and communicate with them.
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 living condition these days does not provide the opportunity for
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 to know each other, they can hold some neighbourhood events to see each other. By attending local events,
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 can speak and even make new friends.
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, some neighbourhood citizens can arrange some competitions or cultural ceremonies;
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, locals are invited and attracted to join. In conclusion, today's lives make
people
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 not know each other in a living district, and capital cities have enlarged the number of residents.
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,
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 vary their living location more often than in the past.
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, I believe that by holding local events, they can tackle
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 issue.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Community spirit
  • Isolation
  • Surveillance
  • Safety and security
  • Vulnerability
  • Support networks
  • Local gatherings
  • Foster
  • Social media platforms
  • Neighbourhood watch
  • Emergency situations
  • Natural disasters
  • Shared resources
  • Crime rates
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