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When international media (including movies, fashion shows, advertisements and other TV programs) convey the same messages to the global audience, people argue that the expansion of international media has negative impacts on cultural diversity. What is your opinion?

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It is widely thought that the repetition of the same information from different types of popular international
media
 can have influence badly on a variety of cultures. I agree with
this
 statement.
Although
 it helps
people
 from all over the world be aware of international events, it can lead to the destruction of the local
media
 resources and form
people
’s opinions in a one-sided way. Expansion of the international
media
 can kill national sources of news,
such
 as local television, radio or newspapers.
For example
, if a large global magazine increases its popularity, a smaller one can lose a huge number of its subscribers and
hence
 go bankrupt.
As a result
, not only employees will lose their job positions, but
also
 citizens lose a source of the local messages and events, which can cause social and political problems. Another problem which can be created by an extension of international
media
 is its influence on
people
’s opinions.
In particular
, many data sources use propaganda to motivate
people
 to make a political decision, without letting them think about the situation on their own.
Consequently
, society became obedient and infantile, and it is easy for
people
 in charge to manipulate
people
 for their own benefit. Some
people
 believe, that if the same messages are spreading by different popular
media
 resources, it is easy for
people
 to follow global changing, news or activities.
However
, nowadays
people
 can use the internet to find news about any topic from different points of view, without being influenced by preconceived opinions.
In other words
, it is important for
people
 to be able to consider information from different sides to form their own judgement. In conclusion, international
media
 increasing its popularity constantly, but
people
 should not forget to check any piece of information, which was heard in the television program or advertisements.
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