Many working people get little or no exercises either during the working day or in their free time and have health problems as a result. Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

Doing sports is a necessary activity for
workers
especially nowadays with the
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sedentary
sort of our living. Today many employees continue their job without any hard activity and
practice
during their
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.
This
trend may result in serious health issues for
workers
. The reasons behind
this
trend
maybe
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not having enough
time
and a huge amount of workload.
However
, there are remedies for
this
that
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could act as an enemy for
workers
. Since rushed and long work hours do not let the
worker
find enough
time
to
practice
during the day.
This
may cause very hazardous health issues for the
workers
.
Also
,
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amount of workload and pressure can be the other causes of
this
tendency for less
exercising
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. When the
workers
find themselves in the sort of harsh conditions they may lose their will to exercise every day. Considering the reasons below, there are some ways
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overcome
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to
this
problem.
Firstly
, managers can detect
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special
time
for their
worker
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to exercise and be healthy. The CEO of companies could make a plan for creating some places for exercise.
Besides
, governments could encourage the
worker
by advertising on the TV.
This
practice
could cause
workers
understand
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the importance of
this
practising and tend to
practice
more.
For instance
, The Google company have a special place for its
worker
to method at a special
time
of the day. All in all, nowadays exercising could be useful
practice
for people and there are many reasons why
workers
should do
this
habit and
also
some solutions for
this
.
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