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People today sleep less and less. What are causes of this? Do you think this is a positive development?

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People
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 nowadays are sleeping lesser than their previous generations. Increasing working
hours
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 and a change in lifestyle are the main reasons behind
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. I feel
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 is a negative development in the long run as it results in serious
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 issues among
individuals
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. Most
individuals
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 are working longer than ever and it is the primary reason that they are getting lesser bedtime. Today's jobs have become very competitive and
people
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 now need to spend extra
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 getting their work done, and
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, they cut down on their sleeping
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 to make that extra time for their work.
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, most IT jobs require
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 to stretch longer than 10-12
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 daily and they get to sleep lesser than normal.
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, the living style of overall society has changed where sleeping lesser has become a norm. To exemplify, folks across every age group now tend to stick to their mobile screens till late at night connecting with friends or watching movies,
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 late-night parties etc., and
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 don't get enough time to sleep properly.
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 shift in sleeping patterns is detrimental to the overall
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 of our present population. Many
people
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 who continue to sleep lesser develop chronic diseases
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 as hypertension, insomnia etc.
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, they tend to weaken their power to focus as their mind is mostly exhausted without proper rest and sleep, which is essential for everyone's good
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.
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, we feel fresh and rejuvenated after a good nap at end of the day else we feel frustrated in case we miss out on our sleep regularly.
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 results in
individuals
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 deteriorating their
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 over time. To conclude, the present population has started cutting down on their sleeping quota due to rising work
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 and changing living habits. In the long run,
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 shift can cause more harm than good as
people
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 can severely damage their
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 due to lack of sleep.
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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • instant gratification
  • rapid advancement
  • instant communication
  • online shopping
  • fast food delivery
  • social media platforms
  • immediate feedback
  • recognition and validation
  • efficiency
  • productivity
  • convenience
  • decreased patience
  • delayed gratification
  • realistic expectations
  • work ethic
  • unrealistic expectations
  • stress
  • dissatisfaction
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