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In some countries, an increasing number of children are overwehight or obese as a result of eating too much fast food. Banning fast food from shcool canteen is the best way to fight this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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These days fat children constitute to increase in some countries. Some of that reasons are school foodstuff. So, fast
food
 should be forbidden to fix that issue. I totally agree with
this
.
This
 essay will discuss the main idea and will draw my conclusion.
This
 debatable problem,
food
 is one of the most important things to keep kids having a healthy life.
For example
, the usual time to go to study is, in the morning
that is
 mean they will have breakfast. So,
that is
 the
first
 thing they are going to eat. Brain's strengths need something to make them focus and active.
Moreover
,
that is
 a long time in school-place they should have
food
 to stay awake as much as in that period without the need to eat other unhealthy stuff, like oatmeal with honey and some snacks for the middle of the morning as fruits with some nuts.
This
 proves clearly
that is
 parents' mission.
On the other hand
, the management of the canteen eatables sells to studies fast
food
, especially that things with colores add.
For instance
, children after eating those things immediately get extra vitality but, in a short time opposite the healthy
food
.
Hence
 the belief that could make a real problem inside their bodies if no one changes it to sell clean
food
. After a careful analysis of
this
 case, I believe that it is huge responsibility should of both sides to handle it inside the school and family on the outside.
In addition
, teach them that healthy
food
 is delicious and to grow up with a strong and healthy body and mental.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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