Nowadays celerities earn more money than politicians. What are the reasons for this? Is it a positive or negative development.
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people
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effects
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for Yuna Kim who is a successful figure skater since the Korean public saw her feet that are hurt by her practice when she was young. Use synonyms
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politicians
are boring, they believe that popular Use synonyms
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who are singers, actors, and athletes are interesting. What is more, the population wants to be like them. Use synonyms
As a result
, the attention of the public brings about an advertising effect. Linking Words
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written by Hae Gyo Song, who is a popular actor in Korea, is valued at Linking Words
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around
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, their popularities are the key factor in advertising that brings enormous incomes.
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However
, these trends contribute to the country. Not only can word-wide stars earn Linking Words
money
from the local population, but they may Use synonyms
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money
from fans all over the world. Use synonyms
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celebrities
have to pay taxes that increase Use synonyms
the
standard of living as the government can allocate state funds that are collected by taxes to public services. Change the word
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In addition
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such
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development progress.
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