Nowadays celerities earn more money than politicians. What are the reasons for this? Is it a positive or negative development.
In the modern era, it is generally acknowledged that the number
of
incomes of Change preposition
apply
people
who are famous is bigger than that of politicians
because celebrities
have advertising
Correct article usage
an advertising
effect
and have done a lot of effort. Fix the agreement mistake
effects
This
is a beneficial progression as they can contribute to the country and the public’s awareness.
To begin
with, an excessive amount of practice is required to be successful stars, and therefore
the population is impressed at
their hard training. Change preposition
with
Therefore
, people
tend to willing
to pay Add a missing verb
be willing
money
for their celebrities
. A majority of Koreans love to pay money
for Yuna Kim who is a successful figure skater since the Korean public saw her feet that are hurt by her practice when she was young. Moreover
, due to the attention of citizens, celebrities
can gain excessive money
. While the public tend
to think that Change the verb form
tends
politicians
are boring, they believe that popular people
who are singers, actors, and athletes are interesting. What is more, the population wants to be like them. As a result
, the attention of the public brings about an advertising effect. For example
, a post that is
written by Hae Gyo Song, who is a popular actor in Korea, is valued at arround
500,000 dollars. Correct your spelling
around
Hence
, their popularities are the key factor in advertising that brings enormous incomes.
However
, these trends contribute to the country. Not only can word-wide stars earn money
from the local population, but they may also
get money
from fans all over the world. As a result
, celebrities
have to pay taxes that increase the
standard of living as the government can allocate state funds that are collected by taxes to public services. Change the word
their
In addition
, if VIPs are sympathetic or want to have a good reputation, they would donate to charities or participate in volunteering for the community. Since the public tend
to mimic their Change the verb form
tends
favorite
Change the spelling
favourite
people
, such
a kind trend will be spread among ordinary people
. For instance
, a survey conducted by Korea University has revealed that celebrities
’ behaviors
are more powerful than Change the spelling
behaviours
politicians
words. Change noun form
politicians'
politician's
Hence
, earning a lot of money
among stars is a
development progress.
In conclusion, Remove the article
apply
celebrities
are more
richer than Change the word
apply
politicians
since the public are
impressed Correct subject-verb agreement
is
at
stars’ efforts and they can Change preposition
by
also
advertise efficiently. Their money
can be used for the country with the population’s participation.Submitted by hiasince38 on
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