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All education and healthcare should be funded by the government and free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#education #healthcare #government
Nowadays there is a suggestion that the
government
 should fund educational opportunities and medicine for all
people
. I disagree with
this
 statement simply because we will need to find new resources of money and not everyone wants to get these facilities. The
first
 reason why I am of
this
 opinion is the lack of resources. In modern times the
government
 is not able to provide free education and healthcare which have good quality. I think it is connected to the budget which was given for it and if we want to get these options for everyone the
government
 will find new ways for increasing the amount of money.
For example
, they can do it with help of a tax increase but citizens will not like
this
 idea and there will be more problems because of it. Another reason is that a lot of
people
 are able to pay for education and medical service themselves. It can be seen, that a lot of
people
 prefer to pay for it because they want to get better learning and healthcare.
Besides
,
this
 part of the population has enough capital for that. To conclude, there is a belief that the
government
 should pay for all education and healthcare to make everyone be able to get it. Maybe for
someone
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 it will be great, but from my point of
view
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 it is a bad idea because now the
government
 does not have enough money to provide it and there are a lot of
people
 who have the resources to pay for these services.
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