In many countries, crimes rate amongst younger people has been rising. Discuss the causes and solutions for this problem.
The
number of
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crime
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rate
in a society can be a good index of safety. Use synonyms
Accordingly
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an increasing
the increasing
crime
waves. Considerably Use synonyms
this
issue has happened because of joblessness and Linking Words
internet
technology. Having identified Use synonyms
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this
reasons , Correct determiner usage
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government
must take feasible solutions.
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the government
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with, one of the main culprits Linking Words
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crime
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the crime
rate
among Use synonyms
adolescent
is unemployment. Due to Fix the agreement mistake
adolescents
economic
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the economic
the
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third
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rate
of employment has fallen, Use synonyms
also
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money
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living
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a living
such
as shoplifting or burglary, Linking Words
robbery
, and offer them tempting prices Correct word choice
or robbery
that is
why we can see a large Linking Words
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number
people
who become culprits. To illustrate Use synonyms
this
, according to a recent poll, crimes are committed mostly by Linking Words
younger
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the younger
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in countries with Add the comma(s)
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low
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the low
level
of hiring. Being responsible for solving Fix the agreement mistake
levels
this
incident, Linking Words
government
can dedicate Add an article
the government
money
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young Wrong verb form
educating
people
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how
to earn Change preposition
on how
money
by working as online freelancers since not only is it easier to earn Use synonyms
money
but Use synonyms
also
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people
can have a vast online platform to choose between preferable well-paid jobs so that the Use synonyms
crime
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rate
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money
problems will decrease.
Apart from unemployment, Use synonyms
internet
technology is another item that accounts for Use synonyms
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crime
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the crime
rate
. Needless to say that Use synonyms
by
the Change preposition
with
emerge
of Replace the word
emergence
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internet
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the internet
people
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through
the world can keep in touch, but it is not always for good purposes and some crimes and the process of attracting Change preposition
throughout
of
committers happen through the Net. Change preposition
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parents might think that letting their child Linking Words
to
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internet
would be beneficial, they are at the risk of joining offender comities. Add an article
the internet
For example
, there are some online groups trying to teach teenagers how to be a part of Linking Words
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crime
or even Add an article
a crime
the crime
in
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on
Dark
web teens are paid to commit illegal tasks ranging from Correct article usage
the Dark
rubbery
to Correct your spelling
robbery
kill
someone, so we can understand Wrong verb form
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internet
can be harmful if it is not controlled. One of the best solutions for Add an article
the internet
this
issue can be educating teenagers at school and Linking Words
alarm
them Wrong verb form
alarming
for
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about
disadvantages
of Correct article usage
the disadvantages
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internet
and gang online groups can have plusCorrect article usage
the internet
that
, subsequent problems that might happen Correct determiner usage
apply
for
them, so Change preposition
to
this
awareness can help them as a guide not to commit a Linking Words
crime
.
To conclude, there are some factors Use synonyms
such
as unemployment and the Linking Words
internet
culprit for Use synonyms
increase
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an increase
the increase
of
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in
crime
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rate
needed to Use synonyms
be solve
by educating youngsters Change the verb form
be solved
how
to earn Change preposition
on how
money
as online freelancers, and awareness about Use synonyms
crime
groups attract youngers through Use synonyms
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internet
.Add an article
the internet
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