In many countries, crimes rate amongst younger people has been rising. Discuss the causes and solutions for this problem.

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number of
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crime
rate
in a society can be a good index of safety.
Accordingly
, numerous countries worldwide have been struggling with
increasing
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an increasing
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number of
crime
waves. Considerably
this
issue has happened because of joblessness and
internet
technology. Having identified
this
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these
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reasons ,
government
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the government
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must take feasible solutions.
To begin
with, one of the main culprits
for
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crime
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the crime
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rate
among
adolescent
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adolescents
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is unemployment. Due to
economic
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the economic
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crisis in
the
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third
-world countries the
rate
of employment has fallen,
also
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gain
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money
through working for
living
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a living
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. While jobless adolescents have financial issues, offenders would find them as good candidates to commit crimes
such
as shoplifting or burglary,
robbery
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or robbery
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, and offer them tempting prices
that is
why we can see a large
quantity
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number
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of young
people
who become culprits. To illustrate
this
, according to a recent poll, crimes are committed mostly by
younger
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the younger
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generation due to financial problems
especially
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,especially
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in countries with
low
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a low
the low
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level
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levels
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of hiring. Being responsible for solving
this
incident,
government
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the government
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can dedicate
money
to
educate
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educating
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young
people
how
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on how
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to earn
money
by working as online freelancers since not only is it easier to earn
money
but
also
people
can have a vast online platform to choose between preferable well-paid jobs so that the
crime
rate
stems from
money
problems will decrease. Apart from unemployment,
internet
technology is another item that accounts for
crime
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the crime
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rate
. Needless to say that
by
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the
emerge
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of
internet
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the internet
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people
through
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throughout
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the world can keep in touch, but it is not always for good purposes and some crimes and the process of attracting
of
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committers happen through the Net.
Although
parents might think that letting their child
to
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use
internet
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the internet
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would be beneficial, they are at the risk of joining offender comities.
For example
, there are some online groups trying to teach teenagers how to be a part of
crime
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a crime
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or even
in
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on
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Dark
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the Dark
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web teens are paid to commit illegal tasks ranging from
rubbery
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robbery
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to
kill
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someone, so we can understand
internet
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the internet
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can be harmful if it is not controlled. One of the best solutions for
this
issue can be educating teenagers at school and
alarm
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them
for
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about
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disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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of
internet
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the internet
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and gang online groups can have plus
that
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, subsequent problems that might happen
for
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them, so
this
awareness can help them as a guide not to commit a
crime
. To conclude, there are some factors
such
as unemployment and the
internet
culprit for
increase
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an increase
the increase
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of
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in
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crime
rate
needed to
be solve
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be solved
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by educating youngsters
how
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on how
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to earn
money
as online freelancers, and awareness about
crime
groups attract youngers through
internet
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the internet
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.
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