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Many parents are buying too many toys for their children. To what extend is this positive or negative for children?

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Having too many playthings can give a great sense of inner satisfaction to a child. On
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 account, a number of
children
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 are being provided with a plethora of
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. From my point of view, it has had more practical effects on
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 compared to those with less amusing
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. On the positive side, having various kinds of
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 can improve creativity. Needless to say that since some of them are designed to develop imagination, buying them can be beneficial for a child. Boosting creativity,
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 have made
children
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 more ready when it is time for starting
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.
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, it has been witnessed that
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 who have created shapes with Legos before going to
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 have had better performance in lessons that needed creativity like Art.
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, having a carefree childhood by playing with
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 results in a higher EQ level. Higher levels of EQ lead not just to understanding better at
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 but
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 affect a whole meaning. To illustrate
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, according to a recent poll those
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 who tried a wide range of
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, had higher EQ levels, and 2 times faster in learning new tasks at
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.
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, having too many playing items can result in
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 with a lack of social skills. While taking
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 to the park and playing with peers can improve social behaviours, buying too many
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 makes them sit in a room being amused with
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 and getting used to loneliness all day long.
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, they become reluctant to meet new people, so having too many
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 is not always beneficial. In conclusion, despite that playing with
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 can lead to low levels of interaction for a child, from my point of view it may help them to explore the world and themselves.
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, there should be boundaries in everything.
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