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Some people believe it is better to study at local universities while others believe it is more beneficial to study overseas. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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It is believed by some
people
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 that studying at local
universities
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 is suitable for themselves while others are of the belief that studying overseas is
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better. From my perspective, I prefer to
study
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 overseas to
study
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 at local
universities
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. It is understandable why some
people
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 advocate receiving an education in the local
country
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. The
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 rationale is that the tuition of local
universities
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 is more affordable than that at oversea
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.
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,
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 in Canada have to pay about 23,000 CAD per year for their school fees while the tuition fee of
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 in Vietnam costs approximately 3,000 USD per year.
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, only
people
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 who have financial capability can pay for studying abroad. Another reason is that they likely have to experience culture shock when they move to another
country
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. It is necessary that
people
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 need to spend a little time
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familiarizing themselves with the new living conditions and learning environments. If
students
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study
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 in their home
country
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, they would be focused totally on their studies.
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, If you were one of the
students
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 who
study
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 overseas, you would search for important things in a new
country
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 or healthcare service of it.
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, I believe that pursuing
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education overseas will be more beneficial to
students
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. The
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 rationale is that they can get better career prospects.
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 could be because
people
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 who get an education in other countries will be received internationally recognized degrees. They have a good chance to secure a nice job and earn high salaries. Another reason is that overseas
students
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 can meet many
people
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 who come from other different countries in the world. They tend to discover more different cultural backgrounds which helps them have more knowledgeable. In conclusion, while
people
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 believe studying at local
universities
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 is good for
students
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, I wholeheartedly believe that
students
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 can get more benefits to
study
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 overseas.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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