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Young drivers are careless & overconfident, and too many are killed in accidents. To eliminate this problem, we could teach children the skills of safe driving while they are at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#drivers #accidents #children #skills #school
Teaching young
people
 how to
drive
 is an important topic to discuss in
this
 essay, in my opinion, I agree to put a subject in the schools to teach the young
people
 how they
drive
,I will offer arguments for
this
.
Firstly
, when the schools put the subject to teaching the young
people
, it will help them to understand the steps of the mechanism of driving and how they can make correct decisions within driving.
Also
, the teacher who learns the young
people
 can provide more information about how to
drive
 through practice class or car simulators.
Therefore
, the practice driving class can help young
people
 to learn more about the road rules and skills, prepare them to be real drivers and can
that’s make
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 them more mentally with driving,
addition
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, they can read books about the rules to get more information about the diving and how the can ake correct decisions when they driving in real life.
However
, can provide their parents in the process to keep the younger practising with them when
that is
 available. To sum up,
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this
 essay discuss how can provide the
drive
 subject in schools gave more information to the young
people
 and help them to prepare through the practice class.
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