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Some people believe that students should be taught International news as a subject at schools. Others feel that this would be a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #students #news #schools #waste #school #time
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Nowadays by improving technology and develop
internet
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 some
parents
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 prefer our heir learns anymore by taught international news as a topic at school and
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 subject for developed countries is possible,
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,some people do not like our children spend more
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 whit
internet
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 because they think scion be a waste of valuable school
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. both of them talk truth.
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, with the
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 heir can develop herself-knowledge and they can find answers to each question but using a lot of nets is really perilous for them and should not spend more
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 on the
internet
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 because it is fully bad for their health.
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, I think using a computer or laptop is essential for everyone. another hand,children and
parents
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 should know for children have a lot of duties
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 as doing exercise or playing games to keep a fit body or doing cultural work ,
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, going to the cinema or museum even they should know our
parents
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 need to help for housework and should not all the
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 stay in the virtual world.
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,in my view students need to improve science to help the virtual world and specific
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 and I believe it is entirely necessary for them and
parents
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 have to accept
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 subject.
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, students have to observe to use enough and if they can they have to divide our
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 for all work because as you know it is not all the life.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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