You recently went on a trip with a friend and you both took some photographs. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Ask your friend to send you a particular photograph Explain why you need that particular photograph Tell your friend what happened to your copy of it Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Brendan,

#trip #friend #photographs #photograph #copy #addresses #brendan

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Dear Brendan, I hope you are back to work from our long trip

from

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Bali. It was an amazing trip with those brilliant adventures we did together and a took some great pictures as well. Do you remember we captured an amazing

sunsrise

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sunrise

backgroup

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background

backgrounds

picture

overlooking Mt Batur

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This

is one of my favourite pictures from the trip. Can you email me the

picture

? I am in need of

this

particluar

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particular

picture

because I just cannot get

overit

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over it

and thinking to add into my

picture

collection and as well to get it framed so I can display

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the wall in

mybed

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my bed

room. I ask you

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this

specific

picture

beacuse

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because

accidently

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accidentally

deleted the copy of it from the shared files as I was going through each

picture

of our and deleting the unwanted pictures and

organize

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it in a better way. Hoping you will mail me the

picture

as soon as you read

this

letter. Your's lovingly, Naruto

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

160 words

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