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In Many countries the level of crime is increasin and crimes are becoming more violent.

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Introduction
Criminal actions came back to the onset of humanity when Can killed Abel in cold blood. Over time
crimes
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 were developing and varying, so
countries
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 started to pass laws and punishments to control them. As long as the
crimes
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 were progressing the governments became more restricted regards to the rules.
Body paragraph 1
Nowadays, judgment is different, there are courts, juries, lawyers, victims, and procurators, as well as prisons and various
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crimes
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 types,
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; the
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crimes
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 rates are increasing. The
crime
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 rating is not only increasing but
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 the
crimes
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 are becoming more violent every day.
Body paragraph 2
The reasons for how brutal are the
crimes
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 now is not Clear,
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;
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 newspaper and the press announce new
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 in a new place. Some politicians in high-income
countries
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 claim that the level of
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 in developed
countries
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 is lowering,
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, it is inflating. I think it’s because the level of immigration and speech freedom is high there and
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 makes a lot of people take illegal methods to immigrate into developed
countries
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.
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Developing
countries
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 in
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 era suffering from the economic crisis and income gaps between the high social and low social classes, As a consequence; the level of equal distribution of the country’s resources is decreasing and people who are suffering from a shortage in basics turn to be
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.
Body paragraph 4
Drugs
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 normalization is one of the societal catastrophes which is the reason in demo nation of drug-related
crimes
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, especially among youth.
Body paragraph 5
The government of different
countries
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 tries to be more restrictive regards to the law and punishment, and
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 to distribute the concept of equality. As all people are equal under the umbrella of law, the government’s reluctance to consider certain unpleasant actions as a type of
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 is one of the fundamental reasons for increasing the number of victims.
Conclusion
Societies need to upgrade the credibility of the law and the perspectives towards the different actions, as long as, there is a victim.

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