Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals; during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
In
this
contemporary era
the notion behind the conventional and religious Add a comma
,era
festivals
have
been forgotten by the vast majority of Correct subject-verb agreement
has
people
. My point of view does not correspond with aforementioned
statement that, Add an article
the aforementioned
an aforementioned
people
merely want to relish during the festival and they do not care about the concept of them.
First
and foremost, hidden
meaning of Add an article
the hidden
festivals
has the ability to aid individuals to understand cultural roots of them. In the past, festival events used to accompany Change preposition
apply
by
family Correct your spelling
my
gathering
in order to make a great bond between family members. Meanwhile, the oldest member of the family has told myriad patriotic stories about heroes sacrificing their lives for the sake of now we live under Fix the agreement mistake
gatherings
the
safe circumstances. Understanding the hidden concept of the Correct article usage
apply
festivals
especially
at Add the comma(s)
,especially
the
young age, Correct article usage
a
therefore
, can stimulate children's cognitive developments
and leads them to learn more about their historical heroes.
Fix the agreement mistake
development
Last
but not least, having festivals
means that people
have a marvelous
sense of culture which Change the spelling
marvellous
propel
them Correct subject-verb agreement
propels
celebrate
Fix the infinitive
to celebrate
festivals
voluntarily. Nowruz is the
conspicuous example of it. Iranian celebrates Correct article usage
a
this
festival spontaneously in
the Change preposition
on
first
day of spring when all trees and flowers are in full blooms
as well as nature revives again. Fix the agreement mistake
bloom
Likewise
, People
firmly hold that,
Remove the comma
apply
in
Change preposition
to
this
day the God of lightness has defeated the devils and saved the world from darkness. To sum up, if people
understand the meaning behind the festivals
, they will capable of celebrate
Change the verb form
celebrating
these
wholeheartedly.
In conclusion, understanding Correct pronoun usage
them
notion
of every festival can encourage Add an article
the notion
people
not only understand
the cultural and historical roots of their countries but Fix the infinitive
to understand
also
, assist
them to celebrate them enthusiastically.Fix the infinitive
to assist
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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