In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

Having said that if children want to accomplish any success, they should try their best to aim for it. The statement mentioned above has been practised by several cultures. Despite its benefit, there
is
Change the verb form
are
show examples
some risks
also
in giving
this
message to children.
This
essay will discuss some advantages and disadvantages.
A certain
Correct the article-noun agreement
Certain
show examples
positive outcome children have the ability to strive for their passion.
For example
, student-athlete whose aim is the gold medal and to be the
first
in every aspect,
thus
this
thinking will make them obtain additional practice with the goal incorporated by their coach.
This
means to say that to realize
this
at a young age, they have the ability to follow and think of the positive effect if they significantly apply their hard work to achieve their goal. The risk for
this
advice,
on the other hand
, is disappointment and resulting in not trying again.
This
is because once the child makes an effort on certain things, and the outcome is negative he might think that his dreams were destroyed and hope is at its lowest point.
For instance
, the student has made his full attention and focus on studying for an examination,
however
, he still does not manage to have the desired score.
This
will have a negative impact on the kid and resulted in the loss of his confidence and potential least to have trouble with social skills. In conclusion,
This
essay discusses the advantage which is the young ones has the possibility of focusing on their goal, whereas the disadvantage which is the damage
confidence
Change preposition
to confidence
show examples
.
Submitted by brainfreeze on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
What to do next:
Look at other essays: