The car is a disastrous 20th Century invention that has made the world’s cities more dangerous and polluted, as well as being responsible for the deaths of millions of people in accidents. Do you agree or disagree?

It is said that
cars
not only are not safe to use but
also
are responsible for
pollution
.
Although
several attempts have been done to increase
cars
' safety and make them zero
emisson
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emission
emissions
, I am convinced that a great
number
of humans are still dying in
car
accidents
annually and even modern vehicles generate
considerable
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amount of harmful
pollution
. There is a huge improvement in
the
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car
manufacturing since it was introduced to the world for the
first
time.
Firstly
, many safety options have been added to
cars
to make them reliable like seat belts and
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airbags
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air bags
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, which have decreased the death tolls compared to a hundred years ago.
Furthermore
, electric
cars
have been designed to reduce
the
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exhaust fumes and it was told that
this
new generation of
cars
will revolutionise
this
industry. Despite the above so-called developments,
pollution
that is
being produced by
cars
is irrefutable. A great
number
of petrol
cars
are still being used around the world. They are generating a great
amount
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of exhaust fumes with burning oil which is directly released into the atmosphere and is detrimental
for
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human health.
This
problem is even greater in developing countries where
the
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low quality
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oil is being used which produces even more dangerous fumes that can contribute to respiratory diseases like asthma.
In addition
,
the
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electric
cars
have not been successful to eliminate
the
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pollution
.
This
is because the means for generating the electricity needed for them to run
also
produce
pollution
.
Thus
,
cars
still are playing an integral role in making the environment polluted.
Moreover
, the reports show that the
number
of people who were killed in road
accidents
is significant. In spite of all the efforts being done by companies like Benz and BMW, there are still factors that lead to
accidents
.
For example
, poor
roads
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conditions and impaired drivers are factors that can result in
accidents
regardless of how the
car
is conforming
standards
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.
Therefore
,
car
accidents
are still responsible for many casualties. To sum up, though advanced
cars
have been successful to reduce the
number
of deaths and
pollution
compared to the past, one can say that
cars
still cause enormous yearly deaths and
pollution
. I believe that the
pollution
that
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petrol
cars
and generating electricity produce plus other factors involved in
car
accidents
make
cars
a dangerous and detrimental invention.
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