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Writing Samples
Band 6

One of your friends in a foreign country is starting an import-export business, and he has asked you to recommend a product from your country to him. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: say what product you want to recommend to him tell him where he/she can get this product explain why you want to recommend this product

Dear Sam. I hope you and your family are doing well. I was amazed to hear that you are starting your business soon and thanks for asking me about my recommendation on selecting a particular product from my country. I would definitely recommend you
to
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apply
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invest in
a
Correct article usage
the
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 fashion industry. And the product which I think is suitable for your business is "Punjabi Suits" for all ages whether they are older or young women. I already sent your number to "
kapoor
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Kapoor
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 clothes" and they will contact you soon about
this
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 importing and exporting business. I assure you that you can buy a variety of fashionable clothes from there which will be available at cheap rates. Sometimes they offered a discount
while
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 exporting. I recommend
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 product because people from both nations can try and wear different outfits.
Also
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, people of your country
loves
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love
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 to wear traditional attires on distinct
ocassions
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occasions
 and most of them belong to Punjab and other states of India. In
this
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 way, they can attach
with
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 their cultural roots. I hope you will consider my suggestions acceptable. I am looking forward to hearing
fom
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from
 you soon! Yours Faithfully, Tom.

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coherence and cohesion
Consider organizing your ideas more clearly. A separate paragraph for the recommendation and another for explaining its significance would enhance logical flow.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that all sentences are grammatically correct and consider varying your sentence structures for more engagement.
task achievement
Be mindful of spelling mistakes, such as 'occasions' instead of 'ocassions', as these can slightly affect clarity.
suitable writing tone
Your tone is warm and friendly, which is appropriate for a letter to a friend. Good job on maintaining a supportive tone throughout!
complete response
Your recommendation of Punjabi Suits is well-explained, and you provided a good rationale for why this product is suitable for your friend's market.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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