Some people think that it is the responsibility of the government to ensure that people in the country have healthy lifestyles. Other people believe that individuals should be free to decide their own lifestyles. Discuss both opinions and give your own idea.
It is quite common that
people
are increasingly concerned about their physical health
. Therefore
, there is a debate about whether the government
should take responsibility for citizens’ health
. While some people
think that individuals have the autonomy to choose their own satisfying lifestyles I tend to hold a different opinion.
Most people
understand the importance of a healthy lifestyle
, which has an influence on their lifespan. But few people
have the self-control to stay away from bad unhealthy habits, such
as smoking, taking drugs, alcohol abuse, and so on. Thus
, the government
has the responsibility to set up related rules and regulations, stimulate some companies to take investment in the health
industry, and build some outdoor sports infrastructure to promote citizens to take part in outdoor activities. Through these methods, eventually, the whole society has an atmosphere of health
; and citizens will unconsciously choose to have a healthy lifestyle
. Take Germany as an example, to protect citizens’ health
, a regulation that any employee cannot work over 40 hours in a week was set up and a huge number of football fields were built to allow residents to participate in football sports additionally
.
Admittedly, the government
should not disturb dwellers’ right to make choices on lifestyle
. While too many people
are unaware of their surrounding circumstances-which means eating high-oil food or take-out food conveniently or working overnight frequently, etc. In addition
, the concept of lifestyle
in citizens depends on their income, status, parenting, schooling, society, and so forth. Hence
, the government
enables to implement
Replace the word
implementation
many
measures to enhance Change preposition
of many
people
’s awareness of health
fundamentally.
In conclusion, the government
has the priority of changing citizens’ habits that will damage their physical and mental health
, and thus
it plays the majority role in the promotion of healthy lifestyles.Submitted by gzhang_02 on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite