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Writing Samples
Band 7.5

You are working for a company. You need some time off from work and want to ask our manager about this. Write a letter to ur manager. In ur letter . explain why you want to take time off from work. . give details of the amount of time you need. . suggest how your work could be covered while you are away.

Dear Sir, Myself Ravinder, and I'm an employee of your company who has been working dedicately for past 15 years without any day off from my job.
However
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, I need a leave of absence, at least for a month
due to
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 an emergency at my home. To elaborate, my 8-year-old son suffered a serious injury yesterday on his right foot during his football match. The injury was so intense that he lost an excessive amount of blood and ruptured his foot;
as a consequence
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 , the doctor recommended my son to take a proper bed rest at least for 3 weeks or more until the wound fully recovered. So, as a father, it is my responsibility to keep an eye on his health and to provide him assistance to perform his daily tasks
such
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 as bathing, cloth changing, feeding, medications and taking him to the hospital for regular dressings. Moving
further
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, I have completed all the projects before the deadline and I have demonstrated all my daily key responsibilities and upcoming projects to Mr.Smith and he is pleased to help me during my time off from work. I found it a spectacular way to balance between work and family. Waiting eagerly for your considerate and prompt decision. Yours truly, Ravinder.

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task achievement
You explained your reason for leave well, but you could provide more detail about your ongoing work to strengthen your request.
coherence
Make sure each paragraph focuses on one idea to improve clarity.
coherence
Try to be more formal in your greeting and closing to fit the style of a letter to your manager.
task achievement
You clearly stated the reason for your leave and provided a personal touch by mentioning your son.
task achievement
Your letter includes a plan for covering your work, which shows consideration for your responsibilities.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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