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Do you think design of buildings have positive or negative impact. Which way it can effect on work and live?

In
this
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 contemporary era, numerous
people
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 are affected by the design of the building they
work
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 or live
in
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. The world has become a beautiful place with all the technological advancements
and
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 the new buildings are catching up with the new design trends. Even though it is a matter of discussion, I believe the design of the building has a positive impact on
people
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's
work
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or
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and
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 everyday life. There are several reasons for it, first and foremost, the most significant one is that working in a beautifully designed place not only brings creative thoughts but
also
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 motivates
people
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.
This
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 is because it affects
people
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 on a personal level,
it
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and it
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 generates positive energy at
work
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.
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, the research conducted by the American
WorkPlace
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 Association reflects
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similar lines, and
therefore
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, it can be said that the proposition is convincingly justified.
Secondly
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, better
work
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 and home layout impact health positively.
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,
people
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 are inclined to apply for jobs with attractive setups.
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, the above-mentioned benefits affect
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work
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 and everyday lives. On
contrary
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,
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the
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poorly designed buildings are demotivating and bring out the laziness in the workplace and home environment.
This
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 is
due to
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 the fact that humans like to
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 in motivating workplaces, and
this
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 can result in chaos.
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, a lot of workers left the Health Department of Noida
due to
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poorly
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a poorly
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 designed workplace and health issues, which resulted in huge losses to the company.
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, in a nutshell, the aforementioned discussion justifies my stance. In conclusion, I still believe that the benefits of attractively designed buildings are multitude and affect
people
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 positively at
work
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 and at home.

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task management
Make a plan before you write. Start with a short intro that states your view. Then write two clear body parts that each give one main idea with proof. End with a short conclusion.
coherence
Use simple link words to show order and contrast, like 'first', 'also', 'however', 'on the other hand'.
examples
Give strong and real examples. Make sure the example fits the idea you talk about. Some facts can be unsure or unclear.
grammar
Check grammar. Break long sentences into two parts. Use periods to end ideas.
tone
Keep a steady tone. Balance view and end with a clear view on what you think.
content
Clear view that design can have positive effects.
structure
Some good reasons and a real feel for the topic.
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