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Some people believe that in order to reduce crimes, prisoners should be given longer prison sentences while some people think there are other alternative ways. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is noticed that increasing crimes throughout the world,
therefore
, some people deem that granting longer
prison
period
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periods
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 to outlaws can reduce crimes. But, I tend to have a different view about
this
 situation. Admittedly, having a long time in
prison
, especially for evil crime groups,
society
 would be in a phase of harmony. More importantly,
such
 action can deter potential
offenders
, which means they are afraid of
this
 consequence and give up committing, while these situations can be diminished by other reasonable methods.
However
, it is undeniable that educating
offenders
how
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on how
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 to be good
society
 members is a majority way to be widely adopted in every country.
That is
 because human right is deeply planted in citizens’ mind, which means even
offenders
 have the education right, the survival right as normal citizens. Meanwhile, the authorities will set some useful and practical courses
such
 as cooking, painting, and repairing which can teach outlaws how to survive in
society
 rather than rely on committing crimes to gain money.
Besides
, some criminals would take revenge on
society
 when they have a long-time
prison
.
For instance
, some thieves were likely used to taking small items like cellphones, luxury,
wallets
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, they will hurt citizens or even kill someone when they were granted a long time in
prison
. To sum up, granting a long period in
prison
 to
offenders
 is not the best way to reduce the crime rate. The government should combine more effective and humane methods to educate outlaws rather than more severe punishments.
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